A re-editing job on 'Just obeying orders'

I don't often give my nearest and dearest the opportunity to read my MFU stories, but I thought he'd be interested in the one I wrote about  the Vietnam War. 

He made various comments about its structure — he's an Oxford English Lit graduate, so I paid more attention than usual, and I have done some more work on it. If anyone is interested, it's still here, at:

https://archiveofourown.org/works/17510339